quote integration & project description exercise

1- the good: PAYING CAREFUL ATTENTION TO LANGUAGE (strategy 6)
the bad: using generalizing language and evaluative assumptions

When asked to describe his intentions for the film, Kashmere starts by stating that “One intention was to present a revisionist history of Canada-Soviet Summit Series, which is now so ingrained in the national mythology" (Kashmere). The use of the word revisionist is interesting in this context because the issue that Kashmere’s film tackles is not cut and dry. Correlation between violence and hockey can be sensibly argued from both sides of the issue. JORDAN LYNDAKER

FT's comment: This is a good point for analysis, to focus on his language and the use of the word "revisionist". But then your language becomes generalizing ("cut and dry") and you make evaluative assumptions ("sensibly argued") that only serve to weaken your point.

2- HAVE YOU DESCRIBED YOUR PROJECT?

The confection was a simple chocolate bar with almonds enveloped in a mustard yellow wrapper with navy blue and white detailing. The workers of the union designed the wrapper, placing the union’s logo on the right of the old-fashioned paper wrapper. Behind the script name of the candy bar is an American Flag, waving just behind the “We” of “We Got It!.” In the actual packaging, the cardboard is an Irish green with the yellow and red faces of actual union workers. They are holding a giant “We Got It!” banner, and above it reads “Now You Get It! (Sperandio). COURTNEY ALLESSIO

Did she get it right? What other details could she have added? Click HERE to find out.

When you describe your project, describe any visual evidence you have of the piece. Even if it's just one photograph, this is the documentation that represents the piece for the whole world to remember it by, so it holds a very important place and it serves as the only visual evidence about how people know about a project.

If you have the luxury of watching a film or video, make sure to pay attention to the sound, the editing, the voice-over, the music. All these are FORMAL elements, that when described precisely, can help you to pull out interesting observations and analysis. You can use these details as quotes, in the same way that you quote from a book or article.