essay 2 links

Christian Science Monitor article The Christian Science Monitor is a well-respected international newspaper from a U.S. perspective. It includes a daily religious feature, but focuses primarily on secular news coverage.
Superfund 365 - internet art/science project It will feature Onondaga Lake on Day 78. Also with good links.
EPA Superfund site The Environmental Protection Agency is a federal government organization.
Onondaga Lake Partnership Lots of good information here.
Onondaga Lake Park - the county parks website
campaign to restore polluters pay tax

Artists and projects with an environmental focus:
Gardening Superfund Sites
Tiffany Holmes
Ann Rosenthal
Keepers of the Waters - Betsy Damon
Artists Placement Group
California Wash - Helen and Newton Harrison
Lost River Walks - Toronto
Green Museum
Green Arts
Andrea Polli

Essay 1 revision

For Monday, bring your 1st version of the essay along with the new version that incorporates your revisions based on my feedback and peer feedback. AM CLASS: don't forget the extra paragraphs I forgot to collect on WED.

Remember, for this version I'm asking it to be CUT.
It should be no longer than 2.5 pages, single-spaced.

THE BEST PAPERS WILL DEMONSTRATE THAT YOU HAVE USED THE TECHNIQUES FROM THE 2 READINGS I GAVE OUT ABOUT WRITING ANALYTICALLY, and the BLOG LINK ABOUT INTEGRATING QUOTES.

Some things everyone should work on:

-the strongest introductions use a specific example or detail from observations of the website or your field visits to Armory Square
-NOTICE AND FOCUS - use more detail, AVOID GENERALIZATIONS
-10 on 1 - quality is better than quantity
-What is your THESIS? Can you even find it?
-MAKE AN OUTLINE for your paper before rushing in!
-Does each paragraph support the thesis?
-Is the transition from your writing to quotes from Barthes easy for the reader to follow?

Armory Square on the internet

The goal of the first essay assignment is to analyze the contradictions between real places and their representations. The goal is not to critique Armory Square as a place (it's sooo quiet), or to critique the websites for being badly designed or inaccurate (I couldn't find any useful information). To do this, you will need to focus on giving us EVIDENCE:

When you reference the website, quote directly from their images and their copy (written text). Tell me what you are looking at. Is it a picture of a fresh salmon steak? Describe it. Then explain why you think it is on the website and why it's important to your IDEA. You will use formal citations in MLA style to quote a website.

When you reference your visits to Armory Square, specify which street you were on, what building you were standing in front of, what time it was, what kind of people were there, the smells in the air, the sounds of the city, if it was raining and people had umbrellas. Take us there!

Some of you may have discovered that there are other materials about Armory Square on the web and links to other websites. These include:
http://www.armorysquare.com
and
http://www.syracuse.ny.us/armorySquare.asp
and websites for individual businesses, such as the Landmark Theater LINK

You may reference other websites about Armory Square only if you are making a comparison or setting up a contrast. The purpose of this essay is to set up a focused analysis, not a sweeping review.

SyracYOUse assignment outline

The assignment outline: LINK to PDF. This important fact was omitted: essay length = 3-4 pages
It will help to read this again for Wednesday as you review "The Blue Guide" essay, and before you go to Armory Square.

Don't forget the GRAMMAR SLAMMER starts this week!
We will have grammar test in-class in about 7 weeks.